tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post8641449603831232106..comments2024-03-28T05:28:28.567-04:00Comments on Editorial Anonymous: Query 6: Death Comes for the PookaEditorial Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06294247222893767117noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-11062036834160949642015-08-29T02:47:04.410-04:002015-08-29T02:47:04.410-04:00I say many thanks to the father of the website adm...I say many thanks to the father of the website admin I read this, because at this website I know a lot of information information that I did not know before his<br /><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/x1pxDF" rel="nofollow">Tips Penghilang Benjolan Di Leher</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/qVGqOF" rel="nofollow">Pengobatan Diabetes Basah Herbal</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/N9m9lU" rel="nofollow">Cara Mengobati Infeksi Saluran Pernafasan</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/RLwMeE" rel="nofollow">Obat Tumor Tulang Non-Kanker</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/mlrh2T" rel="nofollow">Tips Menurunkan Kadar Gula Darah Penderita Diabetes</a> Evafhadilah28@gmail.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05459615572288662934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-84055622683513043382007-09-24T11:18:00.000-04:002007-09-24T11:18:00.000-04:00--Emay, do you mean OWL IN LOVE by Patricia Kindl?...--Emay, do you mean OWL IN LOVE by Patricia Kindl? I've read it, and my novel's significantly different in both plot and tone.<BR/><BR/>KarenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-58548365402927600832007-09-24T09:52:00.000-04:002007-09-24T09:52:00.000-04:00I feel like I've read this book. What's the one wh...I feel like I've read this book. What's the one where the girl turns into an owl?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-47722824873219746272007-09-23T01:26:00.000-04:002007-09-23T01:26:00.000-04:00I'm going to decloak here to thank everybody for t...I'm going to decloak here to thank everybody for their input, whether I agreed with it or not. And yes, I did agree with some of it after I got past the ouch, ouch! stage of hopping around and clutching my query. I'm not sure my authorial armor is thick enough for Editorial-Anonymous-strength snark. ;)<BR/><BR/>Thanks again,<BR/>KarenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-68509971387170814592007-09-22T23:09:00.000-04:002007-09-22T23:09:00.000-04:00I think maybe the "slut" impression comes from the...I think maybe the "slut" impression comes from the fact that in one sentence the MC is contemplating going all the way with her boyfriend, and in the very next sentence is ogling the cute new guy. Would it be possible to cut one sentence or the other, or rephrase?Marissa Doylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11248406475808085694noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-89917065207200237952007-09-22T17:29:00.000-04:002007-09-22T17:29:00.000-04:00Pookas are cool.Pookas are cool.lizzy_lynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12440553174754279495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-73361709801857652402007-09-22T16:08:00.000-04:002007-09-22T16:08:00.000-04:00I don't think the main character is a "slut" for b...I don't think the main character is a "slut" for being the girlfriend of one character while having a crush on another. <BR/><BR/>Especially since her boyfriend doesn't know she's half pooka, and clearly the other fox-spirit guy KNOWS what its like to be an OTHER.<BR/><BR/>This is a classic set up. Does the MC risk her boyfriend's horror and tell him who she is? Does she chicken out and maybe take the easy road and reject him before he can reject her?<BR/><BR/>And what about the Fox guy? Does being a pooka make him a better person, or worse.<BR/><BR/>These are all interesting places that I'd want to go.<BR/><BR/>My only "advice" if you can call it that is to maybe make it more clear in the query which part of the plot has more weight. Right now they both seem equal -- murders and the love triangle. One has to be dominant, and drive the bulk of the story. I'm assuming its the murders, but I couldn't tell that from the query.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-54644635313270875312007-09-22T14:47:00.000-04:002007-09-22T14:47:00.000-04:00I hope that the author realizes that there was not...I hope that the author realizes that there was nothing bad said about her writing - just that the query needs to be changed if she wants it to grab the reader and make sense. <BR/><BR/>I personally LOVE the idea of "the others" as a sub-class that is persecuted, as EA says, like the x-men. I don't think that's a mean comment at all, I think that's a compliment. But I do think it needs to come earlier if we are to make sense of the rest of it.<BR/><BR/>I also think your tone - "foxy. as in fox-spirit" - is funny. But I do agree again with EA that the mystery is interesting and you need to get to it faster.<BR/><BR/>I think you are reading "absurd" as negative, when I don't think EA meant it to be. I know that personally, I would want this book to be somewhat zany and over-the-top - hello, she's a teenage crime-solvin' POOKA, she better have a sense of humor about it! - and I think that's what EA meant by "absurd", not "bad.Literaticathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15513424208149456614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-78211635547495268702007-09-22T14:08:00.000-04:002007-09-22T14:08:00.000-04:00How gullible am I? I really thought there was an a...How gullible am I? I really thought there was an advisory board!!! I have been humbled:)You're right about the other words like, brownies, pixies being silly sounding, but pooka just sounds too similiar to poopa, or doopa or something that I don't take it seriously. I'm so sorry to have laughed at the writer's expense but Ea's comments about guys liking animalistic sex and fairyland cornucopia were funny....and really the writer should be proud, because EA didn't even bash her writing or say the premise was beyond repair, she just wants it switched up a bit. Just an FYI, I like the spelling phouka the best:)angelarenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13639436719051155045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-10173346402520035042007-09-22T14:04:00.000-04:002007-09-22T14:04:00.000-04:00I've been on the recieving end of snarkiness befor...I've been on the recieving end of snarkiness before, and laughed at myself, but I find it hard to laugh now. There's a fine line between funny and nasty. <BR/><BR/>That said, I appreciate the input regarding the word "pooka." I'll consider tweaking it so it's less "laughable."<BR/><BR/>Author of the queryAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-57244504785302625112007-09-22T13:54:00.000-04:002007-09-22T13:54:00.000-04:00and angela - i don't you to think i'm picking on y...and angela - i don't you to think i'm picking on you. just playing devil's -- um, or in this case, POOKA'S -- advocate.Literaticathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15513424208149456614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-37985741882148059882007-09-22T13:52:00.000-04:002007-09-22T13:52:00.000-04:00angela: i was joking about the CMToUAB, obviously....angela: i was joking about the CMToUAB, obviously. but i don't think it takes a PHD to know that this term exists. In fact, every single thing I know about Irish Mythology has come from <I>published children's books</I>, including POOKAS. <BR/><BR/>JK Rowling used the terms "grindylow" and "veela", those are "weird" but correct words. the SPIDERWICK series & other Holly Black books have made hay with "brownies" and "pixies" and "nixies" and "kelpies" - the last of which, in particular, are nothing to laugh about, since they will eat you just as soon as look at you. <BR/><BR/>I just really don't think there is anything wrong with the word Pooka, since it MEANS something and it not a random made up word. Though, again, I'd probably change the spelling.Literaticathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15513424208149456614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-62027822136808965632007-09-22T13:34:00.000-04:002007-09-22T13:34:00.000-04:00Oh for goodness sakes....There's a Celtic Mytholog...Oh for goodness sakes....There's a Celtic Mythology Terms of Use Advisory Board that would be upset if an author changed the name "pooka" to one that depicted a better sense of ancient mythology or folklore, for the average reader (not the celtic Ph.D's?}? I looked it up and you're right, even a slight change in spelling could make it seem more authentic and not remind me of a pet's name.--- The Phooka (Old Irish), (also Pooka, Puka, Phouka, Púka, Pwca in Welsh)--- So... I'm gonna have to disagree with you literacat that the premise would have to be changed if you change "Pooka" to a more serious word ? I mean this is fiction/fantasy, Right? OR are we going for historical fiction? No matter, I like the premise of the story and would read it, even if the word "Pooka" would take some getting used to! I know who wrote this too and she's good at what she does along with being brave for posting, but I really do think as an avid reader that word, whether due to spelling or whatever, detracts from the seriousness of the story and no writer wants that to happen(or any publisher for that matter).angelarenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13639436719051155045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-92113216054399261762007-09-22T11:28:00.000-04:002007-09-22T11:28:00.000-04:00a pooka is a shapechanging creature out of celtic ...a pooka is a shapechanging creature out of celtic faerie mythology. <A HREF="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/P%C3%BAca" REL="nofollow">here's the wikipedia article</A>. <BR/><BR/>The word "Pooka" cannot be changed, Angela, unless the premise of the book is also changed - if there is a book all about a shapechanging creature that LOOKS like a pooka and ACTS like a pooka but is called a "hexor" or something ... the author is liable to get letters from the Celtic Mythology Terms of Use Advisory Board. <BR/><BR/>particularly because <I>lots</I> of people, particularly people who read lots of fantasy and folklore, know what it is, and don't find it laughable.<BR/><BR/>(the word can be spelled differently, however. that might help.)<BR/><BR/>and yes, HARVEY was a pooka.<BR/><BR/>and no, I did *not* write this - but i think, despite a bad query, i'd be tempted to read it.Literaticathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15513424208149456614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-53687007966246375422007-09-22T10:28:00.000-04:002007-09-22T10:28:00.000-04:00Pooka, as I know it, is from the play, movie calle...Pooka, as I know it, is from the play, movie called "Harvey"<BR/><BR/>It is the invisable rabbit.<BR/><BR/>I think I know who wrote this query and she has guts for posting.<BR/>I hope it works out for her. She got some nice suggestions here. And funny ones to boot.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-19975618915196021302007-09-22T09:59:00.000-04:002007-09-22T09:59:00.000-04:00Wow. Thanks for giving me a laugh. I actually HAVE...Wow. Thanks for giving me a laugh. I actually HAVE heard about pookas (is that the plural?) from an animated theme park ride I worked on years ago. I think it might be part of Irish folklore... That pooka appeared as a horse and didn't seem nearly as troubled or promiscuous!Gina Perryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07470793439269219158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-6070567805414219502007-09-22T08:49:00.000-04:002007-09-22T08:49:00.000-04:00I would read this too.......EA, your comments are ...I would read this too.......EA, your comments are so damn funny!!!I wish somehow the word pooka could be changed too, because it's such a non-sensical word that it's easily laughable! But I think the premise of the story rocks!angelarenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13639436719051155045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7986595816238301046.post-61927564090017903812007-09-22T07:22:00.000-04:002007-09-22T07:22:00.000-04:00hm. i'd read it!another anonymous editorhm. i'd read it!<BR/><BR/>another anonymous editorAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com